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: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys
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on Thursday, February 05 @ 03:35:28 UTC
The-Lyrical-Miracle writes:: " You don't have to IM me on msn.
It's all good, I know that you're PMSin'.
I just want you to know..that you are my cutie.
And oh.. baby I wanna get in your booty.
I got my own style while I'm gently kissin' your lips.
Mean-while, I'll be running my fingertips down your hips. Slide my hands down into your pants feelin' your legs.C'mon babe let's dance and have some
intimate sex.
Fuck anyone who ain't down with my shit. "
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Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Ravenloft (devinouis@hotmail.com) on Thursday, February 05 @ 18:24:41 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | Poetry, you can tell, I rarely submit,
You, however, write only the worst of shit.
Now, I,
I can't tell a lie,
Your rhymes suck
Because have run out of luck.
Give it up "Yo",
Your poetry blows.
See my scheme,
A fool of you it makes it seems.
Don't worry about "bein' down with this shit",
A faggot you are, more than a bit. |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Honey on Sunday, April 04 @ 23:54:41 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | The-Lyrical-Miracle??? The only micacle about your lyrics are the fact that no one has shot you for making other peole suffer through them. God...and you put it under peaceful?!? I doesn't even go with the fuckin song! Damn, if you want a poem about sex..there are much better and more erotic ways to do it. I feel bad for you if you ever try to use that on a chick....trust me, it's a turn off. The only thing that you'll be have some intimate sex with using this shit will be a teddy bear. Someone should cut your hands off for that one. You're not one of the 504 Boyz..so, please, do the world a favor and don't try to be! |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Wednesday, April 07 @ 18:58:07 UTC | | Listen i think it was good as far as rhymes go, but you need to lay off the sex talk |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by perv on Tuesday, July 13 @ 15:39:29 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) http://thepowerofomnipotence.com | | Inspired! such a witty little epithet i refer you to my poem 'closer' which is about the same thing although, i admit, the voice is for a different audience. |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Monday, August 09 @ 13:08:57 UTC | Hey I got to agree with everyone else this poem sucked but on the bright sde you got a shit load of people to read yourrhymes and thats basically the point of this. No offense but if you send something in again please dont send some shit like this.
Best of luck
peace |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Friday, August 20 @ 16:57:03 UTC | | idk i thought it was pretty funny but its definetly sound better in a rap then on a poetry site |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Saturday, September 11 @ 02:01:11 UTC | | how did this get to be like the most popular. Itz alright but i wouldn't say it woz great. |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by inspire on Thursday, October 28 @ 18:49:15 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | all I can say is real cute! honestly |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by blovely (blovely@cox.net) on Friday, November 12 @ 16:14:36 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | I've been around the block.
I've heard fools jaw-jackin.
I'm glad this is poetry and not southern rappin.
I don't feel your words,
Mr.Lyrical-Miracle.
but I'm from the boot so I'll be hospitable!
I've heard better!
Much Love. |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Damaris (demi1988@yahoo.com) on Tuesday, December 14 @ 11:09:30 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | good job ..dont let nobody put you down with your poetry cuz thats how u feel....
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Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Thursday, March 03 @ 16:18:02 UTC | isn't it funny how no one has really paid attention to anything this guys ever put on here? yeah, some people have read them, but this is the only one anyone gives two shits about. And i've read nastier ones. read randy's poems for example. This poem is just old and done and not worth all of the publicity it's getting.
Jennifer |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Saturday, March 12 @ 09:45:47 UTC | that song is awsome and i think 504 boys should become more famous and popular again
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Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Wednesday, April 13 @ 18:14:31 UTC | | wazz up im 13 i can rap i got a grop called 3jr in we or ching to get sind up so pleas read this and my name is steve nix in my addreas is 660 north union st in russiaville in |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Saturday, April 16 @ 12:41:58 UTC | | i love your song. i get sme in th best of moods |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Thursday, April 28 @ 10:22:25 UTC | | i thought it was aight.its different.just keep doin u.fuck what erbody else got 2 say! |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 0)
by Anonymous on Thursday, May 05 @ 13:24:50 UTC | | u suck dude u suck ass u suck shit u suck pamela u suck paris u suck george bush u suck everyones ass u suck cocks u asre ur one big puusy dude |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Lee-Civico-Cambell on Wednesday, June 08 @ 10:19:00 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | Sadly the best thing about this piece is the name of the author. Imagine how let down I was to read the poem itself. I can only imagine that someone has visited this hundreds of times a day to make it the most read piece, either that or someones computer freaked out.
Then end line says to me "I know it's bad but I can't handle criticism".
Sorry to be negative but it's true.
Lee |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Towenstark on Monday, September 05 @ 20:13:21 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | Shit's the word....how long did it take you to read your own 'shit' to get 18 thousand reads??? |
Re: I can Tell Remix - 504 Boys (Score: 1)
by Towenstark on Monday, September 05 @ 20:24:19 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | Shit's the word....how long did it take you to read your own 'shit' to get 18 thousand reads??? |
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