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: 18-11
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on Friday, December 30 @ 02:30:08 UTC
biggybird06 writes:: " 18 years of being alone
18 years with no true home
18 years of hidden anger
18 years running from danger
18 years of depression
18 years of hidden aggression
18 years I've been left in the dark
18 years I've been lost without a clue
18 years sitting and wishing
18 years and for 11 I've been missing you
11 years with cold-heartedness
11 years with a dumb wish
11 years with pain and cries
11 years with you gone and nothing to gain
11 years with danger
11 years with me running from God
18 years I am
11 years you've been gone
How does this broken child carry on?
~Shanika Guyton Biggybird06@yahoo.com "
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Re: 18-11 (Score: 1)
by BodhiTree (burningbright2@aol.com) on Saturday, December 31 @ 00:25:33 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | I dont want to be too technical.....but I really tried to suspend my reality for this until you said you are exactly 18 years old. I honestly cannot concieve of a baby being depressed....depression comes with puberty usually.....thats all.....you must have had a happy time in your life but you just cant remember it....even if it was unhappy, i dont think you can put the label "depressed" on it....
wow, you fell in love at 7? and then you lost him and from then on you've been all alone FOREVER?thats sad.....i had a boyfriend of sorts and we broke up around age 6 or so.....not really.....its more like he moved....heh
Maybe it is just me, but this is a bit......melodramatic, cheer up.....life sucks, yeah, but we have to figure some way to not make it suck so much. Im sure it gets better......Im your age and Im still trying to see the light at the end of the tunnel......
i watched this movie, its really morbid, its called The United States of Leon, anyway its pretty cool. it talks a lot about how by crying over unhappy stuff you get nothing done. by questioning why, we end up nowhere.
I think it has a point, we just have to keep going and not waist so much time wondering.
anyway, im rambling........
Nicole
as an aside, we have had some problems in the past because you and I dont really see eye to eye.....but i promise that i am not trying to get on your case about this......Im just criticizing parts of it to make it better if you want to try, of course.....i might sound horrible......but im not trying to be if that is the case....
over and out |
- Re: 18-11 by BodhiTree on Sunday, January 01 @ 20:41:46 UTC
- Re: 18-11 by biggybird06 on Thursday, January 19 @ 11:32:55 UTC
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