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on Monday, February 14 @ 16:27:35 UTC
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: Watching me (pleaz comment)
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on Monday, February 14 @ 16:27:35 UTC
incoherentgirl writes:: "
you
watch me while I
cry
but its alright
cause
I'll be fine
I promise
can't you see me
smile?
you
watch me while I
grab this knife
but its alright
cause
I'll be fine
I promise
can't you see me
smile?
you
watch me while I
end my life
but its alright
cause
I'll be fine
I promise
can't you see me
smile? "
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Re: Watching me (pleaz comment) (Score: 1)
by MusicalPoet on Monday, February 14 @ 18:29:34 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | Good write. I like the way it was written. Keep it up. |
Re: Watching me (pleaz comment) (Score: 1)
by Jazz (jazz13697@hotmail.com) on Tuesday, February 15 @ 03:09:06 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | i liked the way that was written, staged and strong, effective like it xxxxxxxjazzxxxxxxxxx |
Re: Watching me (pleaz comment) (Score: 1)
by blackrose12 (silentassasin_ak@yahoo.com) on Tuesday, February 15 @ 10:58:02 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | | I like the way that you constructed this poem. Excellent job. |
Re: Watching me (pleaz comment) (Score: 1)
by JDcool (jdcool038@yahoo.com) on Tuesday, February 15 @ 15:47:30 UTC
(User Info | Send a Message) | i liked the meaning behind it. it's probably not the same meaning you have, but this is what I think:
a person on the outside looks as if everything is okay with them. That nothing is wrong and their life is perfect. And every one around them thinks this. Until one day the person ends their life. And no one knows why, except them. It's sad. But it happens everyday. I like this poem because it's a different look at life. No one's written about this lately. Good job.
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